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The first work I will discuss is the digital storytelling from the students at the University of Kragujevac, Serbia called “Following in the Footsteps of My Ancestors”.  The title itself gives a vague, yet a strong statement that can be followed up with evidence as the viewer continues through the media clip, leading away from a thesis but more of a factual sentence to be proven true or false.  While watching the digital story, building a thesis can be easily done as the narrator lays out multiple points as to how she is following her ancestors’ steps.  Throughout this digital story, the only source of ‘references’ or ‘resources’ is a family tree and ancestor stories that the narrator brings up.  There is not a variety or quality of these resources because they are only brought up at the beginning of the story, being followed up by facts and opinions from the narrator.  At one point, the narrator brings up trees that were “planted when [her] ancestors set foot on the mountain” but there is no way to look back and see that for ourselves.  The creativity of the project itself follows the title of the digital story and is able to show what Serbia looks like to those who may not ever be able to visit that area of the country which is not able to be done through a paper.  Since there is no real thesis, you can only interpret what the narrator is saying connected to the title, that she is following the steps of her ancestors.  The digital story from the students of the University of Kragujevac is a wonderful evidence piece for a thesis that is not stated if the thesis was present, this project would fill all of the core criteria.

The second work by Ellie Drewry, “Universities offer disability support, but finding it is another matter” is a very personal and opinionated selection with great evidence but a fuzzy thesis.  The article talks about how Drewry struggled with getting disability support for her college education but she does not have an open thesis to being up proper points.  I believe if she had stated at the beginning of her article the ways that she tried that failed and that those needed to be changed she’d have a full thesis.  Because I believe this, I also believe her whole article is one large thesis that can be extended into a persuasive article about how colleges can change their disability programs and her current article could be her introduction and first paragraph of a much larger article.  Drewry’s article is majorly focused on her own story, uses one clear resource from the chair of the University of Bristol’s disability network and ‘general’ statements about the DSA to give people a general idea about what the allowance is for.  There is no creativity behind this blog post because it contains a singular stock photo of a man in a wheelchair in a classroom setting.  Though this photo connects to the blog post, there is no creativity in a singular stock image to support a thesis or full article though it connects the thesis and design.  The way that this post does more than what it could on paper is that it is online so that it can be accessed anywhere across the world not just wherever you can obtain a copy.